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Weekly English
Monday 27th April
Kidbrooke Park Primary School – Home Learning Monday 27th April 2020 LI: To make notes from a variety of sources Success Criteria: • Read several articles about Captain Tom Moore • Identify key information • Make notes under various subheadings • Reflect on what I have read Remember to write the date and LI in your book and underline it with a ruler.
Kidbrooke Park Primary School – Home Learning
Who is this man?
Captain Tom Moore
Task 1
You will need to research who this man is using
at least 4 different websites. You will need to
record key information you have found out
under the following subheadings:
• Personal information (age, date of birth,
where he lives, full name, is he married,
does he have a family etc.)
• His goal (What is he trying to achieve, why
and when will it end?)
• Previous jobs
• His success so far (how far has walked, total
money raised, song success etc.)
Gathering information from more than
• What people say about him one place (source) helps to ensure the
information is reliable and can be trusted.
• Other (birthday cards received, knighthood?
Etc.) Useful website links on next page
Kidbrooke Park Primary School – Home Learning
Useful website links – you may use your own as well
Look back at previous page for the subheadings to be used. Write all notes in
your book, you will need these throughout the week. More effort today will really
pay off further on in the week.
website links
Remember https://www.bbc.co.uk/news/av/uk-
52306266/coronavirus-captain-tom-moore-finishes-
Notes do not need to use full 100th-lap-in-nhs-fundraiser
sentences. They use the least
https://www.smoothradio.com/news/coronavirus/how-
amount of words possible but still much-money-captain-tom-moore-raised-nhs/
convey meaning. Notes start with a
bullet point and are organised https://www.bbc.co.uk/news/uk-england-beds-bucks-
under a subheading which is herts-52356546
appropriate to the information
being collected. https://www.mirror.co.uk/3am/celebrity-
Example news/breaking-captain-tom-moore-scores-21892474
Personal information
https://www.bbc.co.uk/news/uk-england-beds-bucks-
• Born – 30th April 1920 herts-52354991
https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Tom_Moore_(fundraiser)
If stuck… Think about getting the answers to the following questions 1 Who is Tom Moore? 2 When was he born? 3 Where was he born? 4 What did he start on April 6th 2020? 5 What are the medals that Tom wears? 6 What does he call his endeavour? 7 How much had he raised by the morning of 16th April 2020? 8 How did he explain his motivation for his NHS fundraising? 9 Where does he live now? 10 Who does he live with?
Reflection time Task 2 – Write in your book a few sentences about your opinion of Captain Tom Moore. Below are a few points to get you thinking. • Has anything surprised you about this old gentleman? • Do you think you will be like him when you are a pensioner? • What did you feel when reading about his life and what he is achieving today? • What words would you use to describe his personality e.g. perseverance, honor, selflessness,
Tuesday 28th April
Kidbrooke Park Primary School – Home Learning Tuesday 28th April 2020 LI: To identify features of an informal letter Success Criteria: • I look at the model example of an informal letter and discuss features highlighted • I identify features from the answer slide that I missed or did not know • I try to find all features of a different informal letter using a given checklists of my own Remember to write the date and LI in your book and underline it with a ruler.
What we learnt yesterday Have a brief skim read of the facts about Captain Tom Moore on the next few pages – you may add bits to your notes if you wish. (5 minutes)
Captain Tom Moore Captain Thomas Moore (born 30 April 1920), known as Captain Tom, is a British former soldier who served in India and in the Burma campaign during the Second World War. He later became an instructor in armoured warfare. On 6 April 2020, at the age of 99, he began a walk around his garden in aid of NHS Charities Together during the COVID-19 pandemic, that has so far raised over £12.2 million against an initial target of raising £1,000 by his hundredth birthday. Early life and family Tom Moore was born in Keighley, Yorkshire, on 30 April 1920 and was brought up in the town. He was educated at Keighley Grammar School and completed an apprenticeship in civil engineering. Military career Moore enlisted in 8 Duke of Wellington (145 Royal Armoured Corps) at the beginning of the Second World War, and was selected for officer training in 1940, eventually rising to the rank of captain. He served in the eighth battalion of the Duke of Wellington's Regiment (West Riding) (DWR) before being transferred to the ninth battalion DWR in India. He served in Arakan in western Burma and afterward in Sumatra after the
Japanese surrendered. Originally an infantry regiment, the DWR was converted to a tank unit as part of the Royal Armoured Corps and on his return to Britain, Moore served as an instructor at the Armoured Fighting Vehicle School in Bovington, Dorset. Tom's 100th Birthday Walk Moore during the fund-raising initiative walk. He is wearing the 1939–1945 Star, Burma Star, and War Medal 1939-1945. On 6 April 2020 he began a fundraising campaign to help the British National Health Service (NHS) during the COVID-19 pandemic by aiming to complete one hundred, 25 m (27 yd) laps of his garden, in ten-lap chunks, with the help of a walking frame, branding the endeavour "Tom's 100th Birthday Walk For The NHS". The JustGiving page for his walk reports that, as of 08:20 GMT on 16 April, he has so far raised in excess of £12.2 million. The initial £1,000 pound goal was realised on Friday 10 April hence the target was subsequently increased to £100,000 and then to £500,000 as more people around the world got involved. The fund-raising soared exponentially when the British media publicised the endeavour. Moore who has
recently taken to Twitter has expressed joy over accumulating such a staggering amount of money for the NHS. Funds raised by Moore are being spent on well-being packs for National Health Service staff facilitating rest and recuperation rooms, devices to enable hospital patients to keep in contact with family members, and community groups who support patients once discharged from hospitals. Moore, currently walking 10 laps a day of his back garden in order to achieve his initial target of one hundred laps, has now said he will not stop and aims to do a second hundred. Moore has explained his motivation: When you think of who it is all for—all those brave and super doctors and nurses we have got—I think they deserve every penny and I hope we get some more for them, too. Personal life Moore has lived with his daughter Hannah, son-in-law and two grandchildren, in Marston Moretaine, Bedfordshire since 2008. In recent years he has received treatment from the NHS for skin cancer and a broken hip.
Today we shall be looking at informal letter structure. What features can you see in the letter to aunty on the next page? Can you find the following? (The answers are on the following 2 pages after the letter)
Y3 Letter Writing: Informal Example Text
Keep flipping back to the previous
Winter Palace Hotel
page to see what you should be
Cairo
searching for.
Egypt
Dear Aunties, 22nd October, 1922
How’s everyone doing back in cold, drizzly England? It’s roasting
hot here in the Sahara!
Well it’s been such a busy week so far here in Cairo while we’ve been
planning our next trip up the River Nile to Luxor. Do you remember that’s
where I told you we’re going to look for King Tutankhamun’s grave? Before
we can leave, I have to make sure we’ve got all of our stuff packed ready.
Mind you, I’ll have to hire dozens of people to carry it all from the boat to
the dig site once we get there since it weighs an awful lot!
My favourite donkey’s leg is a bit poorly and she’s incapable of walking so
I’ll have to get her some medicine and ask a vet to look at her if I can find
one. Hope that’s not too expensive or Lord C will moan about the cost!
I reckon we’re really onto the right place this time. All the information I’ve
gathered shows Tut’s just got to be there. Fingers crossed everyone!
I’ll write again when I’ve got some more news. Love,
Howard XY3 Letter Writing: Informal Example Text
Annotated Genre Features
Winter Palace Hotel 1
sender's address
Cairo
Egypt1
3
appropriate Dear Aunties,3 22nd October, 1922 2 2
the date
greeting
4
introduction How’s everyone doing back in cold, drizzly England? It’s roasting
hot here in the Sahara!4
Well5 it’s been such a busy week so far here in Cairo while we’ve been
planning our next trip up the River Nile to Luxor. Do you remember5 that’s
5
chatty, informal
where I told you we’re going to look for King Tutankhamun’s grave? Before
style we can leave, I have to make sure we’ve got all of our stuff5 packed ready.
Mind you5, I’ll have to hire dozens of people to carry it all from the boat to
the dig site once we get there since it weighs an awful lot!
My favourite donkey’s leg is a bit poorly5 and she’s incapable of walking so
I’ll have to get her some medicine and ask a vet to look at her if I can find
one. Hope that’s not too expensive or Lord C 5 will moan5 about the cost!
I reckon5 we’re really onto the right place this time. All the information I’ve
6
conclusion gathered shows Tut’s5 just got to be there. Fingers crossed everyone!5
7
complimentary I’ll write again when I’ve got some more news.6
close
8
Love,7
finishes with the
sender's name or Howard X 8
signatureY3 Letter Writing: Informal Example Text Annotated Grammar,
All text: the full
Punctuation and Spelling Features
range of spelling,
[Winter Palace Hotel
grammar and Cairo
punctuation features
taught in previous Egypt
year groups present
22nd October, 1922] 6
throughout the text Dear Aunties, 11
inverted
commas in direct
2
correct tense How’s everyone doing back in cold, drizzly England? It’s
9 2
speech
used consistently
3
roasting hot here14 in9 the Sahara! 12
a wider range of
present perfect
words with
tense [Well it’s been14 such a 4 busy week14 so far here in9 Cairo while7 we’ve been prefixes spelled
4 correctly,
‘a’ or ‘an’ used planning3 our next trip up9 the River Nile to Luxor. Do you remember15 that’s e.g. irrelevant,
correctly
5 where I told2 you we’re going to2 look for9 King Tutankhamun’s grave? Before7 autograph,
writing organised incorrect,
into paragraphs we can leave2 I have to make sure14 we’ve got all of our stuff packed ready. disobey,
around a theme superstar,
Mind you, I’ll have to hire14 dozens of9 people to carry2 it all from9 the boat antisocial
6
simple layout
devices in non-
to9 the dig site [once7 we get there since7 it weighs14 an4 awful lot!]10 ]5 13a wider range of
fiction, words with suffixes
e.g. headings and
My favourite donkey’s leg is a bit poorly and she’s incapable
15 4 7 12&13 of walking
9
spelled correctly,
sub-headings so7 I’ll have to get her some14 medicine15 and ask a4 vet to look at9 her [if7 I e.g. usually,
7 poisonous,
conjunctions to can find one.]10 Hope that’s not too8 expensive or Lord C will moan2 about9 the adoration
express time, place
and cause, cost! 14common
e.g. when, before,
after, while, so,
I reckon we’re really onto9 the right place this time8. All the information13 homophones spelled
correctly,
because I’ve gathered3 shows Tut’s just got to be2 there14. Fingers crossed everyone! e.g. which and
8 witch
adverbs to express
time, place and I’ll write2 again8 when7 I’ve got some more news. 15
some of the year 3
cause, Love, and 4 statutory
e.g. then, next,
soon, therefore
Howard X spelling words
spelled correctly
9
prepositions
to express time,
place and cause,
e.g. before, after, 10
subordinate
during, in, because clauses
ofYour turn – Task 2 Use the 2 checklists below to find as many features of informal letters as possible. One checklist is the structure features you will be able to find. The other checklist is for year 3 punctuation, spelling and grammar. In your book write down the list of features you were honestly able to find.
Y3 Letter Writing: Informal
Example Text Oak Tree House
Norwich Road
Swaffam
Norfolk
Dear Howard, 5th November, 1922
We loved getting your last letter from Cairo because it’s great hearing what you’ve
been up to.
It sounds incredible to be in Egypt hunting for all those fabulously beautiful artefacts.
When we showed our friend Ada a picture from the newspaper of what you’re doing,
she said, “Ooh, I wish I was there too!”
All the family is excited to see what miraculous treasures you unearth in Luxor. Or
maybe I should say un-sand? Ha ha! I’ve got a little bet on that there’ll be several
ounces of gold and I don’t want to be disappointed!
I’m sending some new handkerchiefs with this note because I just bet you’ve lost
yours again! It must get sweltering there as well so they’ll certainly come in handy
for wiping your face!
We’re so looking forward to hearing more of your news soon, and good luck
searching for your ‘old pal’ King Tutankhamun.
Lots of love, Aunty Vera XY3 Letter Writing: Informal Example Text
Annotated Genre Features
Oak Tree House 1
sender's address
Norwich Road
Swaffam
Norfolk1
3
appropriate Dear Howard,3
greeting 5th November, 1922 2 2
the date
We loved getting your last letter from Cairo because it’s great hearing what
4
introduction you’ve been up to.4 It sounds incredible to be in Egypt hunting for all those
fabulously beautiful artefacts. When we showed our friend Ada a picture from
the newspaper of what you’re doing, she said “Ooh, I wish I was there too!”5
5
chatty, informal
style All the family is excited to see what miraculous treasures you unearth in
Luxor. Or maybe I should say un-sand? Ha ha!5 I’ve got a little bet on that
there’ll be several ounces of gold and I don’t want to be disappointed!
I’m sending some new handkerchiefs with this note because I just bet5
you’ve lost yours again! It must get sweltering5 there as well so they’ll
certainly come in handy for wiping your face!
6
conclusion
We’re so looking forward to hearing more of your news soon, and good luck
7
complimentary searching for your ‘old pal’ King Tutankhamun.6
close
Lots of love,7
8
finishes with the
sender's name or
signature Aunty Vera X 8Y3 Letter Writing: Informal Example Text
Annotated Grammar, Punctuation and Spelling Features 11
inverted
All text: the full [Oak Tree House commas in direct
range of spelling, speech
grammar and Norwich Road
punctuation features Swaffam 12
a wider range of
taught in previous
words with
2
correct tense year groups present Norfolk prefixes spelled
used consistently throughout the text
5th November, 1922] 6 correctly,
3
e.g. irrelevant,
present perfect Dear Howard, autograph,
tense incorrect,
4
We loved2 getting your14 last letter from9 Cairo [because7 it’s great hearing2 disobey,
‘a’ or ‘an’ used superstar,
correctly what you’ve been3 up to9.]10 antisocial
5
writing organised
into paragraphs
[It sounds incredible12&13 to be in9 Egypt hunting for9 all those fabulously13 13
a wider range of
words with suffixes
around a theme beautiful13 artefacts. When7 we showed2 our14 friend Ada a 4 picture from9 the spelled correctly,
6
simple layout
newspaper of9 what you’re doing2, she said, “Ooh, I wish I was there too!”11 e.g. usually,
poisonous,
devices in non- adoration
fiction, All the family is2 excited to see what miraculous13 treasures you unearth12 in9
e.g. headings and
sub-headings Luxor. Or maybe I should say un-sand? Ha ha! I’ve got2 a 4 little bet on9 that 14
common
homophones spelled
7
conjunctions to there’ll be2 several ounces of gold and I don’t want to be2 disappointed12! correctly,
express time, place e.g. which and
and cause, I’m sending2 some new handkerchiefs with9 this note [because7 I just bet witch
e.g. when, before,
after, while, so, you’ve lost3 yours again!]10 It must get2 sweltering there14 as well so they’ll 15
some of the year 3
and 4 statutory
because certainly13 come in handy for9 wiping your face!]5 spelling words
8 spelled correctly
adverbs to express
time, place and We’re2 so looking forward to hearing more of9 your news soon8, and good
cause,
e.g. then, next, luck searching for9 your ‘old pal’ King Tutankhamun.
soon, therefore
Lots of9 love,
9
prepositions Aunty Vera X
to express time,
place and cause,
e.g. before, after,
10
during, in, because subordinate
of clausesWednesday 29th April
Kidbrooke Park Primary School – Home Learning Wednesday 29th April 2020 LI: To plan a letter Success Criteria: • I include some features of informal letters from previous checklist • I can decide on the content of the letter to Captain Tom Moore • I can arrange ideas in order • I can select an appropriate sign off to my letter Remember to write the date and LI in your book and underline it with a ruler.
I thought it would be a lovely idea to write Tom a letter to tell him how
amazing we think he is and to thank him for his amazing efforts as well as
inspiring us to be the best we can be!
Planning an informal letter
• List ideas of what you will include in your introduction, each paragraph
and your ending
• Include a paragraph explaining how you have heard about Tom
• Include a paragraph to explain how Tom’s fund raiser has inspired you
• Include saying a big thank you to Tom for what he has done for the NHS
• You could end by wishing him a lovely happy birthday for the 30th April
as he is going to be 100!!!The letter which you will be writing tomorrow will look like the layout below. So today we need to know the content of each paragraph. You are just jotting down your ideas and placing them in each paragraph – you are not composing the whole letter today. You choose now what to put in your paragraphs and write it in your book like my example. My ideas for what should go in each paragraph – Who are you writing to? – Dear Mr Tom Moore, In the 1st paragraph I will explain why I am writing to him (thank you) In the 2nd paragraph I will include information about where I have heard about him and what I learnt about him. In the 3rd paragraph I will include how he is inspiring others and what I think of him. (Remember Mondays reflection) In the 4th paragraph I will ask him questions such as what do you plan to do next? what advice has for anyone else wanting to raise money or is he regretting starting such a huge task? In the 5th paragraph I will conclude my thoughts saying a big thank you for what he has done for the NHS. Maybe sign off by wishing him a happy birthday then sign my name and print my name
Thursday 30th April
Kidbrooke Park Primary School – Home Learning Date: Thursday 30th April 2020 LI: To compose an informal letter Success Criteria: • I include some features of informal letters from previous checklist • I change my notes into full sentences • I use correct letter layout
Today we shall write our first draft of our letter to Captain
Tom Moore. There will be mistakes but do not worry as
we can correct these in tomorrow’s lesson.
We will first need to
write our own address
in the top right corner
of the start of our letter
Then the date
underneath (remember
a capital letter for
dates.)Changing ideas into whole sentences that link and make sense can be tricky. Hints – 1) Say what you want to write one sentence at a time out aloud. This will help you hear if the sentence makes sense. 2) Listen again at your word choice, can you choose more impressive vocabulary? Example: change the word ‘great’ to ‘tremendous’. This will improve your writing. You can use the online thesaurus below. https://www.thesaurus.com/browse/great?s=t 3) Think about starting sentences in a variety of ways and not always using the word I. Yesterday’s note In the 1st paragraph I will explain why I am writing to him (thank you) Changes today to become… I am writing to you Tom, to let you know how wonderful I think you are. It’s important to me that I express my gratitude for everything you have done to raise the much needed funds for our NHS service.
Your turn – You have the whole of the time left to work on your letter (approximately 45 minutes) Do not worry if you have not finished in this time as quality is very important, this may take time. Keep in mind the checklists for what makes a good informal letter – we will look back and evaluate our letter at the end of composing.
How did we do today? Look back at the criteria for what should be included in a good informal letter. Even I would struggle to put most of the features in a letter on my first draft! That is why ALL writers go back and edit their work. This makes it the best it can be. A sense of pride can be achieved when you know you have absolutely done your very best. Depending on how far you got today will determine what your task is for tomorrow. You might be completing and editing your work OR editing then publishing your work on computer.
Friday 1st May 2020
Kidbrooke Park Primary School – Home Learning
Friday 1st May 2020
LI: To improve an informal letter
LI: To publish an informal letter
Success Criteria:
• I complete writing the informal
letter using checklist given
• I look for and correct any spelling or
punctuation errors
• I try to improve word choices
• I ensure my writing makes sense
• I type up my letter using ICT skillsHave a look at which features you have not included so far. You might realise that you have included lots of structure features such as writing an introduction or signing with a signature. However, you may have missed the spelling and grammar features. YOU DO NOT NEED EVERYTHING from the 2nd list - but more is best!
You must complete the letter – If you did not finish
this yesterday then this is your first task. Please do
not rush to finish as having quality work from start
to end is important.
If you have finished then now is the time to improve
your work.
Use the online dictionary and thesaurus below to
improve both the spelling and word choices in your letter.
https://www.dictionary.com/
https://www.thesaurus.com/browse/great?s=t
Now add in those pesky full stops, question marks or other
punctuation you may have missed first time.Does it make sense? Be honest, read back slowly the words you have written on the page. This is often different to the words we think we have written. Sometimes our brain works quicker than our hand is able to write. This causes people to miss out words (often the small words like a, or, and but or the.) Correct it now.
And finally… If you have any time left today Type up your work (in Word) using your ICT skills. Either email it to me, or attach it to a blog on the purple mash KPLC notice board.
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