THURSDAY 25 TH FEBRUARY 2021 LO: TO WRITE A DESCRIPTIVE SUSPENSE PARAGRAPH - Lesson 4
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THURSDAY 25 TH FEBRUARY 2021
LO: TO WRITE A DESCRIPTIVE
SUSPENSE PARAGRAPH
Lesson 4
Continuing with our suspense story, your first task is to listen to and read through the full text of The Old House. https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=lEDGfHFSbL0&t=69s Let’s practice with the text map.
CHOOSE THE PICTURE TO CONSIDER • What would you hear? • What would you smell? • What would you be thinking? • What would you be feeling?
• Have a good look at the image. • Make a list of adjectives that describe what you can see but don’t use creepy, scary, frightening etc. • These are much too obvious. Remember your reader’s mind’s eye – you want your reader to understand that this is a creepy place without just telling them.You are the story teller.
REMEMBER OUR TOOLKIT FOR
SUSPENSE STORIES?
For today’s writing we will be considering:
• Cliff-hanger
• Unanswered questions
• Scary sound/ unknown ‘thing’
• Short sentences for tension
• Empty words
• Powerful action verbs
• Character’s journey
•• Now, can you use some of your adjectives to begin to develop expanded noun phrases? • You can remember what an expanded noun phrase is! • Ok • What is a noun? • A noun is a thing (including a person, place or feeling). If you can put a/an or the in front of it, it’s a noun. Find the odd one out on the next slide.
dog cat tree happiness London microphone pandemic computer Glasgow car accelerator India beans warehouse crunch tadpole lawyer grass albatross coffee apple octopus compost table book chair bogey Christmas lamp moon stealthily Venus orange edge omelette kestrel lobster paint bridge Simon giggle property bicycle
dog cat tree happiness London microphone pandemic computer Glasgow car accelerator India beans warehouse crunch tadpole lawyer grass albatross coffee apple octopus compost table book chair bogey Christmas lamp moon stealthily Venus orange edge omelette kestrel lobster paint bridge Simon giggle property bicycle
Stealthily Ok, this is the odd one out. It is not a noun. What is it? It’s an adverb.
Anyway, back to expanded noun phrases. An expanded noun phrase is a phrase full of information about a noun. The dog is a very simple and boring phrase. The panting dog – expands the phrase but we could pack it with much more information to put an image in our reader’s mind. The excited, panting dog raced after the rabbit – gives our reader lots of information to consider and picture.
• The dark boughs of a creaking yew tree loomed like spiders legs.
• Crooked branches beckoned like a witch’s gnarled fingers.
• The mist crawled through the damp grass.
• A cold breeze whispered a silent warning.
Two of these are similes – do you know which?• The dark boughs of a creaking yew tree loomed like spider’s legs. • • Crooked branches beckoned like a witch’s gnarled fingers. • The mist crawled through the damp grass. • A cold breeze whispered a silent warning.
WE ARE GOING TO HAVE A GO TOGETHER
AT WRITING A SHORT DESCRIPTIVE
SUSPENSE PARAGRAPH
TOOLKIT elements for this:
Cliff-hanger
Unanswered questions
Scary sound/ unknown ‘thing’
Short sentences for tension
Empty words
Powerful action verbs
Character’s journeyYOUR TURN!
TOOLKIT elements for this:
You are going to write your own short, descriptive suspense
paragraph. Pick your prompt picture (this presentation is saved
Cliff-hanger
on the website for home learners).
Unanswered questions
Scary sound/ unknown ‘thing’
Challenge 1 – no sentence to start with ‘he or she or name
Short sentences for tension
or they’. No sentence to start with ‘then’.
Empty words
Powerful action verbs
Challenge 2 – use apostrophes for possession.
Character’s journey
The tree’s branches scratched at the boy’s clothes.You can also read
